Join for FREE | Take the Tour Lost Password?
[x]

deviantART

 


She was so beautiful.
I wanted her love.
I was hoping she'd see me, too.
She had the perfect life.
She was an angel.
I stood in line like all guys do.
They tried to get with her.
She was innocent.
Pure as the rain falling on me.
No one could have this girl.
She's too good for them.
And she was just too good for me.
People got frustrated.
But I never did.
They took her out against her will.
One of them held her down.
My girl held her ground.
Beautiful thing they tried to kill.
I showed up at the field.
It took just one look.
Then I unleashed the love I had.
My girl was pure and sweet.
They couldn't hurt her.
I took away the pain she had.
Took her away from them.
Held her close to me.
Felt a "thank you" said to my chest.
I carried her in the rain.
Her blood left no mark.
I took my girl to get some rest.

Now my girl IS my girl.
I rule her world.
Just like now...
:thank God:
...She rules mine.
©2005-2009 ~StarGroupie
:iconstargroupie:

Author's Comments

Written from a guy's perspective. Should be self-explanatory. I think it sucks, but oh well.

Comments


love 0 0 joy 0 0 wow 0 0 mad 0 0 sad 0 0 fear 0 0 neutral 0 0
:iconxetha:
I think you made an excellent poem and that you could do it from a guys view... made it so much better...
keep it up, really :)

--
He is only a stranger, whom I have met before.
:iconstargroupie:
Thank you. I try. (Haha)

--
"I'm not going to change the way I look or the way I feel to conform to anything. I've always been a freak. So I've been a freak all my life and I have to live with that, you know. I'm one of those people."
-John Lennon
:iconstargroupie:
Um, as a side note....doing things from a guy's perspective isn't that hard for me. I'm a literature freak and I have performed male pieces in my Oral Interpretation class. So I just think the same way I do when I'm performing....like a guy.

--
"I'm not going to change the way I look or the way I feel to conform to anything. I've always been a freak. So I've been a freak all my life and I have to live with that, you know. I'm one of those people."
-John Lennon
:iconxetha:
aaa... okej :)
I don't think the poem would have had the same feeling,
if it would have been from a girls point of view.... that’s what I mean :)

--
He is only a stranger, whom I have met before.
:iconcloudstrif3:
Dude that's so awesoome! You just gave me a blush of hope ;)

--
"Don't Take Things For Granted Or You'll Start Regretting Every Memory"
:iconstargroupie:
I know what you mean. I personally think that the guy-to-girl love is more romantic than girl-to-guy. Girls are more mushy and they give love away easier than guys do. It's more intimate and more real when from a guy's point of view. Thank you :)

--
"I'm not going to change the way I look or the way I feel to conform to anything. I've always been a freak. So I've been a freak all my life and I have to live with that, you know. I'm one of those people."
-John Lennon
:iconstargroupie:
About.........????

--
"I'm not going to change the way I look or the way I feel to conform to anything. I've always been a freak. So I've been a freak all my life and I have to live with that, you know. I'm one of those people."
-John Lennon
:iconcloudstrif3:
something ;)

--
"Don't Take Things For Granted Or You'll Start Regretting Every Memory"
:iconxetha:
I agree with you on that....
and no problem I think it is a great poem :)

--
He is only a stranger, whom I have met before.

Details

April 25, 2005
1.2 KB

Statistics

21
1 [who?]
57 (0 today)
0 (0 today)

Share

Link
Thumb

Site Map